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Simplifying a sentence
Announcing the arrival of Valued Associate #679: Cesar Manara
Planned maintenance scheduled April 17/18, 2019 at 00:00UTC (8:00pm US/Eastern)Can “conceived” be used as “assumed”?Help understanding this sentence structure: “many a congressman was”“She laughed as though there (was/were) a chance he might have said anything else.”“The Germans were attacking, and the French”. Why is it wrong?Use of “To” in a sentence?Is the sentence *I had my skills improved considerably* correct?Why should the verb in this sentence be present tense vs. past tense? (GMAT problem)Until + subjunctiveIs “I like those except apple” correct?“Which exams is he taking?” or “Which exams are he taking?”
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The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
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The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
7 hours ago
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Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
6 hours ago
add a comment |
The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
meaning grammar
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
edited 7 hours ago
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
11.5k12536
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
asked 7 hours ago
HsnHsn
264
264
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
7 hours ago
1
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
6 hours ago
add a comment |
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
7 hours ago
1
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
6 hours ago
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
7 hours ago
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
7 hours ago
1
1
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
6 hours ago
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
6 hours ago
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I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
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is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
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I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
add a comment |
I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
add a comment |
I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
answered 7 hours ago
CarlyCarly
1,560213
1,560213
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
add a comment |
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
7 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
6 hours ago
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– DJClayworth
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Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
6 hours ago