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Correct punctuation for showing a character's confusion
The 2019 Stack Overflow Developer Survey Results Are InPunctuation-Quote or Quote-Punctuation?Background speech with foreground dialogueIs there a standard for dealing with lyrics in dialogue and narration in creative writing?What is the correct casing for a character's title?Do you bold punctuation directly after bold text?Which one is the correct dialogue punctuation format?Punctuation help needed — first-time novelistCorrect punctuation for he said, she saidCapitalisation after punctuation in dialogueTrying to figure out the correct type punctuation for dialogues
I'm trying to show that the narration (third person limited) is being interrupted by the character's thought process, and I'm not sure what punctuation is best for this situation.
So far, I've tried two approaches: dashes and parentheses. I'm not a huge fan of either. Is there a better way? Alternatively, is there a rule about which mark to use?
Here's an example:
1. Single Dash: The demon - she? He? gestured towards the supply wagons.
2. Parentheses: The demon (she? He?) gestured towards the supply wagons.
(The MC is meeting a pack of demons for the first time. She's not sure how to tell the two genders apart.)
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I'm trying to show that the narration (third person limited) is being interrupted by the character's thought process, and I'm not sure what punctuation is best for this situation.
So far, I've tried two approaches: dashes and parentheses. I'm not a huge fan of either. Is there a better way? Alternatively, is there a rule about which mark to use?
Here's an example:
1. Single Dash: The demon - she? He? gestured towards the supply wagons.
2. Parentheses: The demon (she? He?) gestured towards the supply wagons.
(The MC is meeting a pack of demons for the first time. She's not sure how to tell the two genders apart.)
style formatting punctuation
asked 6 hours ago
Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
1,003314
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I'm trying to show that the narration (third person limited) is being interrupted by the character's thought process, and I'm not sure what punctuation is best for this situation.
So far, I've tried two approaches: dashes and parentheses. I'm not a huge fan of either. Is there a better way? Alternatively, is there a rule about which mark to use?
Here's an example:
1. Single Dash: The demon - she? He? gestured towards the supply wagons.
2. Parentheses: The demon (she? He?) gestured towards the supply wagons.
(The MC is meeting a pack of demons for the first time. She's not sure how to tell the two genders apart.)
style formatting punctuation
asked 6 hours ago
Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
1,003314
I'm trying to show that the narration (third person limited) is being interrupted by the character's thought process, and I'm not sure what punctuation is best for this situation.
So far, I've tried two approaches: dashes and parentheses. I'm not a huge fan of either. Is there a better way? Alternatively, is there a rule about which mark to use?
Here's an example:
1. Single Dash: The demon - she? He? gestured towards the supply wagons.
2. Parentheses: The demon (she? He?) gestured towards the supply wagons.
(The MC is meeting a pack of demons for the first time. She's not sure how to tell the two genders apart.)
style formatting punctuation
style formatting punctuation
asked 6 hours ago
Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
1,003314
asked 6 hours ago
Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
1,003314
asked 6 hours ago
Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
1,003314
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Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
1,003314
asked 6 hours ago
Evil SparrowEvil Sparrow
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1,003314
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Behold! The Mighty Ellipses!
The demon...she? he?...gestured towards the supply wagons.
Ultimately, it's a matter of personal style. Dashes, parentheses, ellipses are all correct.
Part of the reason I prefer ellipses here is, as Amadeus points out, the gender ponderings aren't really an interruption. It's an aside. The narrator's mind is wandering. Ellipses are great for that as they tend to indicate a pause in addition to a change of course.
Dashes also work great for asides, but don't indicate the same level of pause. Note: use a full sized dash (aka a double or em dash) and not a hyphen. Hyphens have other purposes.
Parentheses are okay, especially since you have the question marks to make it clear, but wouldn't be the choice that helps the reader with the flow and rhythm of the sentence.
answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
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And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
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I use a double-dash, and specifically a double-dash (not an em dash), on both sides of the interruption.
The demon -- he? she? -- gestured toward the supply wagons.
Although in your example, the interruption doesn't make sense; it would not make sense to say "The demon she gestured toward the supply wagons."
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Behold! The Mighty Ellipses!
The demon...she? he?...gestured towards the supply wagons.
Ultimately, it's a matter of personal style. Dashes, parentheses, ellipses are all correct.
Part of the reason I prefer ellipses here is, as Amadeus points out, the gender ponderings aren't really an interruption. It's an aside. The narrator's mind is wandering. Ellipses are great for that as they tend to indicate a pause in addition to a change of course.
Dashes also work great for asides, but don't indicate the same level of pause. Note: use a full sized dash (aka a double or em dash) and not a hyphen. Hyphens have other purposes.
Parentheses are okay, especially since you have the question marks to make it clear, but wouldn't be the choice that helps the reader with the flow and rhythm of the sentence.
answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
17.9k13883
And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
9 mins ago
add a comment |
Behold! The Mighty Ellipses!
The demon...she? he?...gestured towards the supply wagons.
Ultimately, it's a matter of personal style. Dashes, parentheses, ellipses are all correct.
Part of the reason I prefer ellipses here is, as Amadeus points out, the gender ponderings aren't really an interruption. It's an aside. The narrator's mind is wandering. Ellipses are great for that as they tend to indicate a pause in addition to a change of course.
Dashes also work great for asides, but don't indicate the same level of pause. Note: use a full sized dash (aka a double or em dash) and not a hyphen. Hyphens have other purposes.
Parentheses are okay, especially since you have the question marks to make it clear, but wouldn't be the choice that helps the reader with the flow and rhythm of the sentence.
answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
17.9k13883
And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
9 mins ago
add a comment |
Behold! The Mighty Ellipses!
The demon...she? he?...gestured towards the supply wagons.
Ultimately, it's a matter of personal style. Dashes, parentheses, ellipses are all correct.
Part of the reason I prefer ellipses here is, as Amadeus points out, the gender ponderings aren't really an interruption. It's an aside. The narrator's mind is wandering. Ellipses are great for that as they tend to indicate a pause in addition to a change of course.
Dashes also work great for asides, but don't indicate the same level of pause. Note: use a full sized dash (aka a double or em dash) and not a hyphen. Hyphens have other purposes.
Parentheses are okay, especially since you have the question marks to make it clear, but wouldn't be the choice that helps the reader with the flow and rhythm of the sentence.
answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
17.9k13883
Behold! The Mighty Ellipses!
The demon...she? he?...gestured towards the supply wagons.
Ultimately, it's a matter of personal style. Dashes, parentheses, ellipses are all correct.
Part of the reason I prefer ellipses here is, as Amadeus points out, the gender ponderings aren't really an interruption. It's an aside. The narrator's mind is wandering. Ellipses are great for that as they tend to indicate a pause in addition to a change of course.
Dashes also work great for asides, but don't indicate the same level of pause. Note: use a full sized dash (aka a double or em dash) and not a hyphen. Hyphens have other purposes.
Parentheses are okay, especially since you have the question marks to make it clear, but wouldn't be the choice that helps the reader with the flow and rhythm of the sentence.
answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
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answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
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answered 5 hours ago
CynCyn
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answered 5 hours ago
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And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
9 mins ago
add a comment |
And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
9 mins ago
And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
And having capitalizing one but not the other is a bit jarring.
– Acccumulation
2 hours ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
9 mins ago
@Acccumulation I assumed that was a typo, which is why I changed it in my version of the example.
– Cyn
9 mins ago
add a comment |
I use a double-dash, and specifically a double-dash (not an em dash), on both sides of the interruption.
The demon -- he? she? -- gestured toward the supply wagons.
Although in your example, the interruption doesn't make sense; it would not make sense to say "The demon she gestured toward the supply wagons."
answered 5 hours ago
AmadeusAmadeus
58.9k676188
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I use a double-dash, and specifically a double-dash (not an em dash), on both sides of the interruption.
The demon -- he? she? -- gestured toward the supply wagons.
Although in your example, the interruption doesn't make sense; it would not make sense to say "The demon she gestured toward the supply wagons."
answered 5 hours ago
AmadeusAmadeus
58.9k676188
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I use a double-dash, and specifically a double-dash (not an em dash), on both sides of the interruption.
The demon -- he? she? -- gestured toward the supply wagons.
Although in your example, the interruption doesn't make sense; it would not make sense to say "The demon she gestured toward the supply wagons."
answered 5 hours ago
AmadeusAmadeus
58.9k676188
I use a double-dash, and specifically a double-dash (not an em dash), on both sides of the interruption.
The demon -- he? she? -- gestured toward the supply wagons.
Although in your example, the interruption doesn't make sense; it would not make sense to say "The demon she gestured toward the supply wagons."
answered 5 hours ago
AmadeusAmadeus
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answered 5 hours ago
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